Obsession
and The Doomsday Machine both
tell the story of a man consumed by the need for revenge at all
costs. Both are apparently based on Moby-Dick (or
so the internet tells me, it's a book I haven't read) but both are
very different. In Obsession
the focus is on Captain Kirk and his determination to destroy the
cloud vampire which 11 years ago attacked the USS Farragut killing
200 of Kirk's then shipmates including Captain Garrovick who Kirk
describes as, “one of the finest men I ever knew”. In The
Doomsday Machine the focus of
the script is on Kirk and the Enterprise crew trying to deal with
Commodore Decker and his determination to destroy the planet killer
which, etc, etc.
Shifting the focus of a story from one character to another completely changes the way it plays out. Swap them over and Obsession is about the Enterprise meeting Commodore Decker whose entire crew has been wiped out by the cloud vampire and The Doomsday Machine is about Kirk's horror as he encounters the planet killer which 11 years before destroyed the USS Farragut. It works on other stories as well. Imagine a version of The Alternative Factor in which the focus of the story is on Kirk so that it is he, rather than Lazarus, who has an insane alternate universe duplicate. Or a version of The Deadly Years where Kirk is immune to the ageing effects and must watch as his friends get older and older.
Shifting the focus of a story from one character to another completely changes the way it plays out. Swap them over and Obsession is about the Enterprise meeting Commodore Decker whose entire crew has been wiped out by the cloud vampire and The Doomsday Machine is about Kirk's horror as he encounters the planet killer which 11 years before destroyed the USS Farragut. It works on other stories as well. Imagine a version of The Alternative Factor in which the focus of the story is on Kirk so that it is he, rather than Lazarus, who has an insane alternate universe duplicate. Or a version of The Deadly Years where Kirk is immune to the ageing effects and must watch as his friends get older and older.
Playing
around like this is fun but it shows how narrow the line can be
between a great story and an average one. Some stories might be
improved by shifting the focus to Kirk (the version of The
Alternative Factor with Kirk A
and an insane alternate universe Kirk B at least sounds like it has
potential) but personalising a story for the lead character doesn't
guarantee success. Operation - - Annihilate! isn't
any better for including the death of Kirk's brother, that's a story
point which gets lost in the episode, and a version of
The Doomsday
Machine
with Kirk out for revenge on the planet killer immediately suffers
from the loss of Commodore Decker; both as the scripted character and
William Windom's performance.
There's another example bubbling away in the background of Obsession. The Enterprise needs to collect urgently needed perishable vaccines from the USS Yorktown and take them to the colony on Theta VII. This is a just a reprise of the plot from The Galileo Seven, where the Enterprise must make a rendezvous to get vaccines to the New Paris colonies where a plague is out of control. Both sub-plots are there to put an arbitrary time limit on the main story, and explain why Kirk cannot simply hang around until the cloud vampire is killed/the missing shuttle is found. Obsession is the more successful version because it distributes this plot strand among the Enterprise crew, rather than giving it to a stroppy Federation official, High Commissioner Ferris. The deadline feels more real and urgent when the reminders are coming from Spock, McCoy, Scotty, and Uhura rather than the Federation Bureaucrat Of The Week. Even though Kirk's deadline is equally artificial in both episodes the one in Obsession is more effective.
There's another example bubbling away in the background of Obsession. The Enterprise needs to collect urgently needed perishable vaccines from the USS Yorktown and take them to the colony on Theta VII. This is a just a reprise of the plot from The Galileo Seven, where the Enterprise must make a rendezvous to get vaccines to the New Paris colonies where a plague is out of control. Both sub-plots are there to put an arbitrary time limit on the main story, and explain why Kirk cannot simply hang around until the cloud vampire is killed/the missing shuttle is found. Obsession is the more successful version because it distributes this plot strand among the Enterprise crew, rather than giving it to a stroppy Federation official, High Commissioner Ferris. The deadline feels more real and urgent when the reminders are coming from Spock, McCoy, Scotty, and Uhura rather than the Federation Bureaucrat Of The Week. Even though Kirk's deadline is equally artificial in both episodes the one in Obsession is more effective.
Elsewhere
in the script, making Kirk the Captain Ahab of Obsession
weakens the story. Effectively Obsession
asks the audience to answer the question, “will Kirk sacrifice
everything for vengeance?” Of course he won't. At the most basic
level the audience knows there is another episode of
Star Trek
next week. By contrast The
Doomsday Machine
is asking the question, “will Commodore Decker sacrifice everything
for vengeance?” and the answer is yes, because he's a guest
character and he's not shackled by the need for everything to be back
to normal next week. The
Doomsday Machine
gets a lot of excitement out of sequences where the planet killer
threatens the Enterprise but those scenes are not asking, “will the
Enterprise be destroyed” (audience: “no”) but “how will Spock
and McCoy deal with Commodore Decker.” A good script avoids asking
the audience questions with an obvious answer. So while The
Alternative Factor
asks “will the universe be destroyed?” (Magic 8-Ball: “Very
doubtful” ) Charlie X
doesn't ask “will Charlie destroy the Enterprise?” it asks “how
will Captain Kirk deal with Charlie?” (Of course a great story will
ask a question as a red herring, so The Devil In The Dark
starts out by asking the audience, “can Captain Kirk defeat the
horrible space monster?” and then completely subverts our
expectations.)
So,
although Obsession
sells itself as being about Captain Kirk's desire for revenge no
matter the cost, the audience goes into the story knowing that Kirk
will not sacrifice his career or life. This can't help but lessen the
dramatic tension. The script hits this problem during a scene when
the Enterprise is chasing the cloud vampire at warp eight.
SCOTT:
Captain, we can't do it. If we keep this speed, we'll blow up any
minute now.
[Scott looks frantic, everyone else is worried. Kirk looks as if he might burst into tears of frustration.]
KIRK; Go to warp six.
[Scott looks frantic, everyone else is worried. Kirk looks as if he might burst into tears of frustration.]
KIRK; Go to warp six.
Kirk decides to slow
the Enterprise even though that will let the cloud vampire escape (he
doesn't know it's going to turn and attack). He decides not to be
Captain Ahab, and puts the safety of the ship before anything else.
In the process Kirk demonstrates why he's a better commander than
Matt Decker, and why Kirk, unlike Decker, never loses his ship. It's
a lovely character moment but this story is about Kirk's obsessive
need to kill the cloud vampire. A scene where the captain puts safety
first doesn't fit. And Kirk is soon back to being determined to kill
the cloud vampire once it turns and engages the Enterprise, before
fleeing again.
Enjoyable as
Obsession is this sort of confusion over details is a problem.
Kirk's plan to kill the cloud vampire involves detonating an ounce of
anti-matter but the episode is unclear about the power of this
explosion. Spock states, “a matter-antimatter blast will rip away
half the planet's atmosphere,” but once on the surface Kirk delays
detonating the anti-matter until the creature is right on top of the
blast, as if the explosion is suddenly much more localised. When the
vampire is feasting on the haemoplasm bought as bait it is all of 40
feet away but Kirk and Garrovick react as if the plan is wrecked
unless they find new bait to lure the vampire right on to the
anti-matter. The anti-matter is primed and ready to blow. Why can't they just detonate and get the hell out of Dodge? Likewise when
beaming Kirk and Garrovick back to the ship the episode does its best
to get tension of out that old Star Trek standby a last second
beam out. However what we see on screen is Kirk and Garrovick start
to appear on the pad before fading, and the transporter hum sound
effect also fading out. Spock raises an eyebrow and tells Scotty,
“reset, energise.” Where have Kirk and Garrovick gone? The
editing, and sound effects, and character reactions suggest the
transporter failed to grab the pair who are still on the planet until
the second attempt, after the shockwave has rocked the Enterprise,
when the transporter locks on and brings them back. Somehow the
episode seems to be treating the anti-matter explosion as
simultaneously planet devastating, and amazingly short lived and
localised.
On the positive side Nurse Chapel gets a very good scene where she brings food to Garrovick's cabin and bluffs him over Doctor McCoy's order to eat. These scenes of her being competent and professional establish her character far more effectively than ones where she has nothing to do but moon over Spock. Also, at the end of the episode is a special effects shot which must have been technically complicated at the time but unfortunately now looks unremarkable. As the cloud vampire moves to feed on Kirk and Garrovick the pair beam out, and the anti-matter detonates. In a single shot the camera must pan to allow the cloud vampire to appear to move, and then stop for the transporter effect. On top of this there are three layers, for want of a better word, of animation; the transporter effect; the cloud vampire; and the explosion.
Ralph Senesky directed Obsession, and his work seems less inspired compared to his earlier stories This Side Of Paradise and Metamorphosis. The Enterprise work is not terrible, in Garrovick's debriefing he sits in front of a solid green background which makes for a good contrast with his red shirt, but possibly the corridors and rooms of the Enterprise offered less opportunity for shot composition than the location filming and extensive planet set of his other stories.
On his website Ralph says,
“I can definitely say there was a drop in quality from THIS SIDE OF PARADISE and METAMORPHOSIS to the other episodes I directed the second season. And I ascribe the reason for this drop to the impossible expectation that episodes of STAR TREK could be filmed in five and a half days and maintain the standard of production excellence that had been established. “
The planet work is excellent. There's a striking overhead shot of the three dead security guards in the teaser, and after Garrovick's squad are attacked there is a hand-held camera shot to suggest a first person view as Kirk and Garrovick approach the bodies. On the cloud vampire's home world Senesky repeats a trick from Metamorphosis and has clouds, little puffs of smoke, added to the sky which brings the set to life, and also makes it look like the cloud vampire could be anywhere.
Actually Senesky repeats two tricks from Metamorphosis. The cloud vampire is realised as an animated overlay placed on top of the picture which allows the creature to stay stationary in the frame and move with the camera. This is how the Companion was realised in Metamorphosis and Senesky's familiarity with the technique may be one of the reasons he was asked to direct this story.
Enterprise crew deaths: 5. Two of the initial survey team are killed outright while Ensign Rizzo survives for a while before dying. Then two of Garrovick's team are attacked and one dies outright while the other is reported as being in a critical condition. When the creature gets into the air conditioning vents on the Enterprise it attacks another two crewmen, again killing one and leaving the other barely alive.The fate of the injured crew is never revealed so let's assume they made a full recovery.
Running total: 42
On the positive side Nurse Chapel gets a very good scene where she brings food to Garrovick's cabin and bluffs him over Doctor McCoy's order to eat. These scenes of her being competent and professional establish her character far more effectively than ones where she has nothing to do but moon over Spock. Also, at the end of the episode is a special effects shot which must have been technically complicated at the time but unfortunately now looks unremarkable. As the cloud vampire moves to feed on Kirk and Garrovick the pair beam out, and the anti-matter detonates. In a single shot the camera must pan to allow the cloud vampire to appear to move, and then stop for the transporter effect. On top of this there are three layers, for want of a better word, of animation; the transporter effect; the cloud vampire; and the explosion.
Ralph Senesky directed Obsession, and his work seems less inspired compared to his earlier stories This Side Of Paradise and Metamorphosis. The Enterprise work is not terrible, in Garrovick's debriefing he sits in front of a solid green background which makes for a good contrast with his red shirt, but possibly the corridors and rooms of the Enterprise offered less opportunity for shot composition than the location filming and extensive planet set of his other stories.
On his website Ralph says,
“I can definitely say there was a drop in quality from THIS SIDE OF PARADISE and METAMORPHOSIS to the other episodes I directed the second season. And I ascribe the reason for this drop to the impossible expectation that episodes of STAR TREK could be filmed in five and a half days and maintain the standard of production excellence that had been established. “
The planet work is excellent. There's a striking overhead shot of the three dead security guards in the teaser, and after Garrovick's squad are attacked there is a hand-held camera shot to suggest a first person view as Kirk and Garrovick approach the bodies. On the cloud vampire's home world Senesky repeats a trick from Metamorphosis and has clouds, little puffs of smoke, added to the sky which brings the set to life, and also makes it look like the cloud vampire could be anywhere.
Actually Senesky repeats two tricks from Metamorphosis. The cloud vampire is realised as an animated overlay placed on top of the picture which allows the creature to stay stationary in the frame and move with the camera. This is how the Companion was realised in Metamorphosis and Senesky's familiarity with the technique may be one of the reasons he was asked to direct this story.
Enterprise crew deaths: 5. Two of the initial survey team are killed outright while Ensign Rizzo survives for a while before dying. Then two of Garrovick's team are attacked and one dies outright while the other is reported as being in a critical condition. When the creature gets into the air conditioning vents on the Enterprise it attacks another two crewmen, again killing one and leaving the other barely alive.The fate of the injured crew is never revealed so let's assume they made a full recovery.
Running total: 42
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